Thursday, June 25, 2026

Writing Assignment: "REVISION"

 

My Comfy House

My house is a very comfortable home. I have lived in it for forty years. It is really time to redecorate but I don’t have that much cash lying around.

One early morning, I put the coffee pot on as I usually do. While I was waiting for the coffee to finish perking, I started watching the vapors rise from the top of the pot. All of a sudden, a beautiful genie, dressed in pink, formed out of the vapors. “Who are you and what are you doing here?” I asked in a fearful voice. The genie answered, “I am the household genie who came to redecorate your house.” She continued, "If you’ll let me, I will add a room on your second floor that will be just glorious..” She whispered in my ear her plans for the remodeling. When the genie was done filling me in, she got to work and designed a magical room,


Revised Copy

Coffee Pot Remodeling

Early one morning, I put the coffee pot on as usual. While waiting for the coffee to finish perking, I started watching the vapors rise from the top of the pot. All of a sudden, a beautiful genie, dressed in pink, as bright as a flamingo, formed out of the vapors. “Who are you and what are you doing here?” I asked in a cautious voice. The genie answered in a voice as smooth as peanut butter being spread on a piece of bread, “I am the decorating genie who comes to remodel your house.” She continued, “If you’ll let me, I will add a room to the second floor that will be just magnificent.” She whispered her plans for the changes in my ear. When the genie was done filling me in on her plans, she got to work and designed a beautiful room filled with magical touches.


Ellen G.

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